If words could be like birds
Flitting from flower to flower
Honeyed promises
would drip
from your lips
And soothe the aching of my soul.
Sweetened vows
like the bird of paradise,
tropical, exotic,
beauty and brilliance
Are duplicitous;
Empty,
holding no more value than to smooth
the ruffled feathers.
Words that are
Estranged from the flight of
Gestures,
voice and
emotion
can be deceptive.
Nothing but a spectacular display
Of the plumage of charisma and intelligence
Meant only for the courtship dance
And so moults once the chase is over.
...
...
...
If only my love I could pledge
By deeds instead of words.
The actual message of the poem is strong. The way you step your words out from "Gestures, voice, and emotion can be deceptive seems like it throws off the beat a bit, but it actually works here because it throws the flow to a stop and changes the work and moves the reader into another direction.
Indeed my friend, if love could be pledged by deed instead, then pale and fleeting words would nary compare to the luster and brightness of a love more true.
Thanks for sharing. Your style is creative, and I'm glad I took the time to analyze it deeper.
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